P.E.E.L. Revision for Out of the Dust Essay

Out of the Dust Body Paragraph Revision: DUE Thursday,  2/6 P. 1, 2; Friday, 2/7 P. 3, 5, 6

WORTH 25 Points, to raise grade up to 95/100. If you have an 85 or above, revision can take you to 100/100.

Set up your paper with items 1-3, and follow all guidelines to get maximum points.

1. Prompt you are answering:

2. Thesis Statement:

3. PEEL revision: Pick ONE body paragraph to polish using this strategy.

Point: Must make a claim or point that supports your thesis. Must be an assertion, something you will prove.

Evidence:

*Must introduce quote (brief summary of previous action) In this quote…

*Must be in the form of a quote, and punctuated correctly (SEE BELOW for examples). Must use page numbers: “Such a sorrow doesn’t come suddenly,/there are a thousand steps to take…” (84).

Explanation:

*Interpret the quote and connect to your point, may need additional information about this section of the book. Explain significance so someone who hasn’t read the book understands.

Language and Link:
*Language: Discuss how the author uses key words, symbols, repetition, literary devices/poetic devices.

*Link back to point, add something new.

General Notes:

*Maintain a formal tone—no “I”

*Use your best vocabulary: be specific, and precise. No “stuff,” “things,” “She was sad.”
*Make sure you cite book correctly by underlining title.

*For In-class work, use your best printing (no handwriting, not rushed)

*Give a sense of an understanding of the WHOLE book, major conflicts. Your focus shouldn't be so narrow it seems like you didn't read the book.
*Transitions lead smoothly from one idea to the next.
*An appropriately formal tone is maintained. Avoid contractions (“has not” rather than “hasn’t”) and do not refer to yourself as “I” or to your reader as “you”. When discussing plot, the present verb tense is used.

QUOTE Tutorial:

 **Quotations are punctuated and presented in a manner consistent with MLA standards. There are several ways of doing this:

Scenario One:

Quoted material is usually preceded by a colon–or possibly a period–if the quotation is “formally” introduced by an independent clause.

Although he is very young, David feels a kind of sexual attraction for Marie: “She was sexy, though my love for her was, as a twelve-year-old’s love often is, chaste.”

ScenarioTwo: 
If the quotation is an integral part of the sentence structure, it is introduced by a comma or no punctuation at all.

On reason David is attracted to Marie is that she is “older, but not too old” and “not as quiet and conventional” as the other adults in his life.

Scenario Three: 
If the quotation is followed by an attributive phrase, the comma is enclosed within the quotation marks.

It is obvious that David’s father and Uncle Frank lack respect for Indians. “Frank said maybe he’ll do a little dance around the bed,” Wes jokingly says when he gets off the phone.

Scenario Four: 
For variety, you can break the quotation up. Just punctuate as you would in any narrative essay.

“What does she need, David?” Wes asks, ”A medicine man?”